Typos are to be expected when typing through a veil of tears. Just saying.
Good heavens, what masterful exploration of Luke's damaged soul and the depth of his self-loathing. I could practically hear his anguish screaming inside my own mind! And it's not just some abstract despair, but so tangible, I was hurting for and with him.
And then there's your handling of Noah; human and hurting, but doing the right thing even if it would cost him everything. I think it would have been so easy to make Noah a little too saintly or martyr-like in this chapter, but you avoided that. I think his actions could be described as saintly as they are almost miraculously magnificent, but the motivations are entirely human. (Sorry, that made sense inside my head!)
What I appreciate most of all is the care you took to show that there's no diminishing of love between them. And maybe it would have been easier for both of them in the short run if they had a different sort of parting. I don't know why, but I had the inkling that it might be less painful for Luke somehow if he could delude himself that Noah could flick a switch and stop loving him so strongly. (But you may be taking this in a completely different direction, in which case, I'm happy to be wrong.)
You continue to make me hate the show for the opportunities it threw away. HERE is how you write one part of a partnership pushing the other away. Here is how you can introduce conflict and still maintain the integrity of a relationship. Here is how you can explore the questions of whether love can sometimes not be enough, or simply too much.
Why can't you have written for this damned show?
On to Part Two in a couple of days. (I'm pacing myself, and oh, what superhuman discipline this is requiring. I just know that if I read this thing in one fell swoop, the emotional fallout would leave me useless for days!)
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Date: 2010-08-10 10:48 am (UTC)Good heavens, what masterful exploration of Luke's damaged soul and the depth of his self-loathing. I could practically hear his anguish screaming inside my own mind! And it's not just some abstract despair, but so tangible, I was hurting for and with him.
And then there's your handling of Noah; human and hurting, but doing the right thing even if it would cost him everything. I think it would have been so easy to make Noah a little too saintly or martyr-like in this chapter, but you avoided that. I think his actions could be described as saintly as they are almost miraculously magnificent, but the motivations are entirely human. (Sorry, that made sense inside my head!)
What I appreciate most of all is the care you took to show that there's no diminishing of love between them. And maybe it would have been easier for both of them in the short run if they had a different sort of parting. I don't know why, but I had the inkling that it might be less painful for Luke somehow if he could delude himself that Noah could flick a switch and stop loving him so strongly. (But you may be taking this in a completely different direction, in which case, I'm happy to be wrong.)
You continue to make me hate the show for the opportunities it threw away. HERE is how you write one part of a partnership pushing the other away. Here is how you can introduce conflict and still maintain the integrity of a relationship. Here is how you can explore the questions of whether love can sometimes not be enough, or simply too much.
Why can't you have written for this damned show?
On to Part Two in a couple of days. (I'm pacing myself, and oh, what superhuman discipline this is requiring. I just know that if I read this thing in one fell swoop, the emotional fallout would leave me useless for days!)