ext_210582 ([identity profile] tsarcasm.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] freakykat 2009-02-17 01:51 am (UTC)

He could feel it…that grief he’d bottled for so long beginning a slow trickle out.

This is possible tense wise but it bothers me. I think "beginning to slowly trickle out" might work better.

Read the whole story though tonight. it was a nice betime read. Kind of almost felt like It's Only Time (wink nudge, nudge badger).

Sy5

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